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“Insights Coming from Observations While Focusing on a Pane of Glass at the Bus Stop”

(28 June 2011)

Shadows dance

across the glass,

intertwined

with the sun’s rays.

The panes reflect,

illuminate,

or sometimes distort the

images of passersby,

revealing reflections,

refractions,

interpretations of reality—

the bright

likeness

of a truck cruising

with more paint

and bling

and noise

than substance,

the darker slant of

a pony-tailed blonde,

hustling to class,

her teal shirt

attempting to mask

the worry

and doubt

seen only through the shadowy

reflection.

The breezes shift,

and the enhanced clarity

of the glass

captures her

exuberance

for life.

The shuttle pulls up

and blocks the play

of light

and dark,

freezing the moment,

eliminating

the shifting patterns of

shadow,

capturing a second

where the ever-

changing influences

of the winds

die.

This protected moment

shows the scene

for what it is—

no guesses,

no façade,

no deceit. But

when the respite passes,

when the bus pulls

away from the hard curb

of reality,

the endless possibilities

hidden in the

changing light

come alive.

Sometimes

nobody else notices

the flashes

of potential,

sometimes we try

to hide

in the inconsistent

comings and goings

in the breeze,

insecure

in the truth trapped in the

silence of the reflection;

although the stillness

is what

sets the truth

free.